Dear god I know that yogurt! It's like train going through tunnel-atomic bomb-tower collapsing in reverse film good! There's another one called Greek Gods that is at least as good. Well, now that that's out of my system, I see the problem with the critiques you're getting. Probably because most of us love your writing so we never saw that. On the up side, once you get a following you can publish the originals and sell the same story to the same people twice, and for more money. It'd be like the uncut unedited version of LOTR, only in book form. Well, I'd buy it anyway, and I bet other people would too. It must be hard though, to try and trim for a wider audience. But that seems to be the way of things since the printing press. Genius is seldom recognized up front.